I took in Professor B’s commentary and I applied it to my narrative. I added more fluidity as that’s what I was suggested to do. I reread ans I saw that the beginning was very choppy and made no sense. I highlighted the changes I made. I also divided some paragraphs when I discussed how my parents influenced my relationship with language.

BUT HERE IS A PREVIOUS VERSION (includes reflection letter)

The beginning was rough and it was difficult to read. I jumped around idea like I go back to the morning when I got ready then to the school then back to the morning to get ready.

Rough Drafts

These are very rough drafts. They need clear assistance and honestly just spell check. There are so many little grammar mistakes that could easily be fixed in my five minutes. The most important takeaway is that small revisions go a long way!